Wednesday, August 10, 2011

 

Poetry Cavalcade 19: All of It


I've never been to Yosemite
Just seen the pictures
Black and white, Ansel Adams
A book of my dad's.

So, I never saw
In greyscale tones
A lithe clever raccoon
Catch a long silver fish.

(That's not in the photos;
Too life-full for that)

Once, I was Peter
On the shore, cooking fish.

Every day
A miracle

All of it God's.

# posted by Mark Osler @ 9:28 AM
Comments:
I love the second verse,especially the last two lines,two syllables long of a haiku.And I like "greyscale tones.Gorgeous.I wonder what would happen if you ended the poem at :"Once,I was Peter/On the shore,cooking fish?" I would prefer to deduce God's miracle myself. I think it would be a stronger poem. Interesting. I have a poem about an Ansel Adams photograph myself: "Moonrise Over Hernandez,New Mexico."
# posted by Blogger Renee : 12:29 PM
 
Yosemite is worth the trip. It's far better in person, in color. I've been twice and can't wait to go back
# posted by Blogger IPLawguy : 2:58 PM
 
Renee-- I agree about the last three lines. It depends on my audience.
# posted by Blogger Mark Osler : 4:32 PM
 
Oh, and Renee-- I ended up leaving that last part in because it links in with a later poem...
# posted by Blogger Mark Osler : 9:29 PM
 
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